From tom-ba at tba-consulting.com Sat May 1 11:17:36 2010 From: tom-ba at tba-consulting.com (Tom Beauchamp-Arnold) Date: Sat, 1 May 2010 11:17:36 -0400 Subject: [Gogglist_pub] Preliminary version PranaView Aura Goggle Booklet Message-ID: <010301cae941$6ec7bbd0$0138a8c0@PROMETHEUS> Good gentles, Here is a preliminary version of the PranaView Aura Goggle Instruction Booklet. It is an entirely new and illustrated write-up. Undoubtedly there will be some points of discussion, but I am not going to rush this to the printer, so we have time for consideration. Please let me know if you have comments, or reply on list. PranaView Aura Goggle Instruction Booklet Blessings, tom -------------- next part -------------- An HTML attachment was scrubbed... URL: From eee at sonic.net Sat May 1 12:21:47 2010 From: eee at sonic.net (Mark Thorson) Date: Sat, 01 May 2010 09:21:47 -0700 Subject: [Gogglist_pub] Preliminary version PranaView Aura Goggle Booklet In-Reply-To: <010301cae941$6ec7bbd0$0138a8c0@PROMETHEUS> Message-ID: <5.0.0.25.2.20100501092047.01dcf280@pop.sonic.net> At 11:17 AM 5/1/2010 -0400, you wrote: > Please let me know if you have comments, or reply on list. My first comment is that this document doesn't open under old versions of Acrobat. I'll have to transfer it to another machine to read it. From tom-ba at tba-consulting.com Sat May 1 14:15:13 2010 From: tom-ba at tba-consulting.com (Tom Beauchamp-Arnold) Date: Sat, 1 May 2010 14:15:13 -0400 Subject: [Gogglist_pub] Preliminary version PranaView Aura Goggle Booklet In-Reply-To: <5.0.0.25.2.20100501092047.01dcf280@pop.sonic.net> References: <010301cae941$6ec7bbd0$0138a8c0@PROMETHEUS> <5.0.0.25.2.20100501092047.01dcf280@pop.sonic.net> Message-ID: <000301cae95a$3ea6d5d0$0138a8c0@PROMETHEUS> Mark, Hmmm. I made it the same way I've always made other .pdf files, so it should have no worse compatibility than before. Could your download be corrupted? Thanks for taking a look. tom > -----Original Message----- > From: gogglist_pub-bounces at primummobile.org [mailto:gogglist_pub- > bounces at primummobile.org] On Behalf Of Mark Thorson > Sent: Saturday, May 01, 2010 12:22 PM > To: tom-ba at tba-consulting.com; Gogglist public > Subject: Re: [Gogglist_pub] Preliminary version PranaView Aura Goggle > Booklet > > At 11:17 AM 5/1/2010 -0400, you wrote: > > > Please let me know if you have comments, or reply on list. > > My first comment is that this document doesn't open > under old versions of Acrobat. I'll have to transfer it > to another machine to read it. > > > _______________________________________________ > Gogglist_pub mailing list > Gogglist_pub at primummobile.org > http://primummobile.org/mailman/listinfo/gogglist_pub_primummobile.org From eee at sonic.net Sat May 1 15:55:23 2010 From: eee at sonic.net (Mark Thorson) Date: Sat, 01 May 2010 12:55:23 -0700 Subject: [Gogglist_pub] Preliminary version PranaView Aura Goggle Booklet In-Reply-To: <000301cae95a$3ea6d5d0$0138a8c0@PROMETHEUS> References: <5.0.0.25.2.20100501092047.01dcf280@pop.sonic.net> <010301cae941$6ec7bbd0$0138a8c0@PROMETHEUS> <5.0.0.25.2.20100501092047.01dcf280@pop.sonic.net> Message-ID: <5.0.0.25.2.20100501125002.01dcf8c0@pop.sonic.net> At 02:15 PM 5/1/2010 -0400, you wrote: >Mark, > Hmmm. I made it the same way I've always made other .pdf files, so >it should have no worse compatibility than before. Could your download be >corrupted? Thanks for taking a look. No, it opens just fine using Adobe Reader 7.0. It does not open under Adobe Acrobat 4.0. From 372rockabyroad at gmail.com Mon May 3 16:04:30 2010 From: 372rockabyroad at gmail.com (Rockaby Road) Date: Mon, 3 May 2010 16:04:30 -0400 Subject: [Gogglist_pub] Preliminary version PranaView Aura Goggle Booklet In-Reply-To: <010301cae941$6ec7bbd0$0138a8c0@PROMETHEUS> References: <010301cae941$6ec7bbd0$0138a8c0@PROMETHEUS> Message-ID: I was mostly reading for punctuation, typos, and obviously awkward grammar and non sequiturs. I do a lot of writing of all sorts and I've done some modest proofing for a small, now defunct, periodical. pg 1 "J .J. Williamson" > read > J. J. "Mark T, and Eric A.," > read > Mark T., pg 2 "materialistic scientific" > read > materialist [I think materialistic has come to be used predominantly with the sense of loving material possessions more than just someone who only sees materiality in the universe] "outgases a small amount of organic volatiles and skin" > [are small particles of skin actually outgased?] "various kinds, (chemical, electrical, magnetic,)" > read > various kinds (chemical, electrical, magnetic), "high-school" > read > high school "for two reasons." > read > for two reasons: "can recognize that fact in themselves" > read > can have validation of their own experience [or some such phrasing would be less marked grammatically] pg 3 "will gradually come into the light of their own minds" [that whole sentence is self-conscious, rewrite it or just take it out entirely] "it also forms" > read > it would also form [so the verbal structure parallels the one right before: "such a scale would allow"] "aura filters.." > read > filters. pg 4 "why this is would be" > read > why this occurs would be "do not gaze at the Sun or" > read > sun [can't see any reason for sun to be capitalized unless it's stylistic with you] "30 - 45 seconds" > read > 30-45 [these kinds of gaps I assume aren't stylistic but they're occurring because of justification of text. A nonbreaking hyphen might solve it] "infra-red" then later in the same paragraph "infrared" > [doesn't matter which one you use but be consistent] pg 5 "Sun is still free" > read > sun [see above similar pg 4] "It's a poor idea most times" > [a bit too informal, almost dialect] rewrite the whole section >It's generally a bad idea to look directly at the sun or its reflection while wearing aura googles. To do so is to risk irreversible eye damage. "30 - 45" > read > 30-45 [see above similar pg 4] pg 6 "Auras are themselves a low light phenomenon" > [do you mean viewing auras is a low light phenomenon or the actual aura is a low light phenomenon?] read? > Viewing auras is. . . "ones hands" > read > one's hands >or> ones' hands pg 7 "This is quite inexpensive. . ." [This comment sounds a little bit insulting to me, no big deal but I'd personally delete the whole sentence. It's an attempt at humor which doesn't quite work for me] "which is what television people would call" > [awkward] read > which in the television industry is called "follow one of the following procedures" > [the steps 1-6 on pgs 7-8 could be renumbered. No 3 could probably be combined with No 2; an either/or shouldn't be two separate Nos 5 and 6, maybe either 5a or 5b instead. Write it so it's one procedure with variations rather than sounding like multiple procedures] pg 8 "Begin Observations." > read > Begin observations. [The all caps sentence looks like a subject head without content following] pg 9 "shadowy, gauzy figuration" > read > a shadowy, gauzy figuration > or > shadowy, gauzy figurations "mist like" > read > mist-like "but in a new configuration." > read > but in a new configuration, as depicted in Figure 2. [you referenced fig 1 in the text but didn't do the same consistently for fig 2] "your condition and auric awakening" > read > your condition of auric awakening [but you've used condition(s) three time in the sentence so change one] > the degree of your auric awakening pg 10 "But, when have you ever taken our advice?" [When haven't we? I don't see what this refers to at all. Delete it completely] "1/16 to ?" > [change the typography of one or the other fraction so they match] pg 11 "Remember that you want to be able to put the observer into a mesoptic visual regime when you start viewing the aura." > [Who is the observer? the "you" of the sentence I assume, though it sounds like it's someone else present; why "want to be able" rather than simply "need to" ; not "regime", you probably meant 'regimen' but that's not exactly it either] read > Remember, as the observer your eyes need to be in a mesoptic visual state/condition when you start viewing the aura. "and / or" > read > and/or [probably another artifact of justifying the text] "this is surprising, upon reflection" > read > "upon reflection." "either the Sun or" > read > sun [it can't be stylistic because it's not consistent!, sometimes you use lower case "s"] pg 12 "best to use an IR lamp" > [only instance you use IR instead of infrared, not consistent. If you wish to use IR for infrared alert the readers in the previous sentence: "Try the same experiments using an infrared (IR) lamp." and then just continue using "IR" in place of infrared for the rest of the booklet. "There are many things that it is possible to do in groups. . ." [orgies for one. Awkward and mistakenly humorous] > read > There are many PranaView experiments you can perform with three or more persons: "acts of the Gods" > [I believe Cap "G" is used when referring to a single monotheistic god] read > acts of the gods "or the Immanenitization of the Eschaton" > [if you want to bring this off at least spell it correctly, "immanentization" but I don't think it works] try? > or any negative effects caused by the Immanent Presence/Coming of the Eschaton pg 13 "Return Merchandise Authorization" > add > Return Merchandise Authorization (RMA) [online buyers are familiar with the acronym and it might add clarity in case they may know the acronym but not what it stands for] "It is not waterproof, although the glass elements are uncoated." > [Did you mean "coated"?] It's not clear if the Limited Guarantee covers multiple disassemblies or any disassembly at all. You might want to clarify that. Why is TOC at the end rather than beginning? Yours Matthew On May 1, 2010, at 11:17 AM May0110, Tom Beauchamp-Arnold wrote: > Good gentles, > > > > Here is a preliminary version of the PranaView Aura > Goggle Instruction Booklet. It is an entirely new and illustrated > write-up. Undoubtedly there will be some points of discussion, but > I am not going to rush this to the printer, so we have time for > consideration. > > > > Please let me know if you have comments, or reply on list. > > > > PranaView Aura Goggle Instruction Booklet > > > > Blessings, > > tom > > > > > > _______________________________________________ > Gogglist_pub mailing list > Gogglist_pub at primummobile.org > http://primummobile.org/mailman/listinfo/gogglist_pub_primummobile.org -------------- next part -------------- An HTML attachment was scrubbed... URL: From tom-ba at tba-consulting.com Mon May 3 18:12:56 2010 From: tom-ba at tba-consulting.com (Tom Beauchamp-Arnold) Date: Mon, 3 May 2010 18:12:56 -0400 Subject: [Gogglist_pub] Preliminary version PranaView Aura Goggle Booklet In-Reply-To: References: <010301cae941$6ec7bbd0$0138a8c0@PROMETHEUS> Message-ID: <006701caeb0d$c92fb690$0138a8c0@PROMETHEUS> Matthew, Thanks very much for your comments? I appreciate the time you took to carefully read my paper & respond. I will seriously consider your suggestions for the next revision. thanks again, tom Thomas Beauchamp-Arnold Owner tom-ba at tba-consulting.com Tel 617.787.5720 www.tba-consulting.com _____ From: Rockaby Road [mailto:372rockabyroad at gmail.com] Sent: Monday, May 03, 2010 4:05 PM To: tom-ba at tba-consulting.com; Gogglist public Subject: Re: [Gogglist_pub] Preliminary version PranaView Aura Goggle Booklet I was mostly reading for punctuation, typos, and obviously awkward grammar and non sequiturs. I do a lot of writing of all sorts and I've done some modest proofing for a small, now defunct, periodical. pg 1 "J .J. Williamson" > read > J. J. "Mark T, and Eric A.," > read > Mark T., pg 2 "materialistic scientific" > read > materialist [I think materialistic has come to be used predominantly with the sense of loving material possessions more than just someone who only sees materiality in the universe] "outgases a small amount of organic volatiles and skin" > [are small particles of skin actually outgased?] "various kinds, (chemical, electrical, magnetic,)" > read > various kinds (chemical, electrical, magnetic), "high-school" > read > high school "for two reasons." > read > for two reasons: "can recognize that fact in themselves" > read > can have validation of their own experience [or some such phrasing would be less marked grammatically] pg 3 "will gradually come into the light of their own minds" [that whole sentence is self-conscious, rewrite it or just take it out entirely] "it also forms" > read > it would also form [so the verbal structure parallels the one right before: "such a scale would allow"] "aura filters.." > read > filters. pg 4 "why this is would be" > read > why this occurs would be "do not gaze at the Sun or" > read > sun [can't see any reason for sun to be capitalized unless it's stylistic with you] "30 - 45 seconds" > read > 30-45 [these kinds of gaps I assume aren't stylistic but they're occurring because of justification of text. A nonbreaking hyphen might solve it] "infra-red" then later in the same paragraph "infrared" > [doesn't matter which one you use but be consistent] pg 5 "Sun is still free" > read > sun [see above similar pg 4] "It's a poor idea most times" > [a bit too informal, almost dialect] rewrite the whole section >It's generally a bad idea to look directly at the sun or its reflection while wearing aura googles. To do so is to risk irreversible eye damage. "30 - 45" > read > 30-45 [see above similar pg 4] pg 6 "Auras are themselves a low light phenomenon" > [do you mean viewing auras is a low light phenomenon or the actual aura is a low light phenomenon?] read? > Viewing auras is. . . "ones hands" > read > one's hands >or> ones' hands pg 7 "This is quite inexpensive. . ." [This comment sounds a little bit insulting to me, no big deal but I'd personally delete the whole sentence. It's an attempt at humor which doesn't quite work for me] "which is what television people would call" > [awkward] read > which in the television industry is called "follow one of the following procedures" > [the steps 1-6 on pgs 7-8 could be renumbered. No 3 could probably be combined with No 2; an either/or shouldn't be two separate Nos 5 and 6, maybe either 5a or 5b instead. Write it so it's one procedure with variations rather than sounding like multiple procedures] pg 8 "Begin Observations." > read > Begin observations. [The all caps sentence looks like a subject head without content following] pg 9 "shadowy, gauzy figuration" > read > a shadowy, gauzy figuration > or > shadowy, gauzy figurations "mist like" > read > mist-like "but in a new configuration." > read > but in a new configuration, as depicted in Figure 2. [you referenced fig 1 in the text but didn't do the same consistently for fig 2] "your condition and auric awakening" > read > your condition of auric awakening [but you've used condition(s) three time in the sentence so change one] > the degree of your auric awakening pg 10 "But, when have you ever taken our advice?" [When haven't we? I don't see what this refers to at all. Delete it completely] "1/16 to ?" > [change the typography of one or the other fraction so they match] pg 11 "Remember that you want to be able to put the observer into a mesoptic visual regime when you start viewing the aura." > [Who is the observer? the "you" of the sentence I assume, though it sounds like it's someone else present; why "want to be able" rather than simply "need to" ; not "regime", you probably meant 'regimen' but that's not exactly it either] read > Remember, as the observer your eyes need to be in a mesoptic visual state/condition when you start viewing the aura. "and / or" > read > and/or [probably another artifact of justifying the text] "this is surprising, upon reflection" > read > "upon reflection." "either the Sun or" > read > sun [it can't be stylistic because it's not consistent!, sometimes you use lower case "s"] pg 12 "best to use an IR lamp" > [only instance you use IR instead of infrared, not consistent. If you wish to use IR for infrared alert the readers in the previous sentence: "Try the same experiments using an infrared (IR) lamp." and then just continue using "IR" in place of infrared for the rest of the booklet. "There are many things that it is possible to do in groups. . ." [orgies for one. Awkward and mistakenly humorous] > read > There are many PranaView experiments you can perform with three or more persons: "acts of the Gods" > [I believe Cap "G" is used when referring to a single monotheistic god] read > acts of the gods "or the Immanenitization of the Eschaton" > [if you want to bring this off at least spell it correctly, "immanentization" but I don't think it works] try? > or any negative effects caused by the Immanent Presence/Coming of the Eschaton pg 13 "Return Merchandise Authorization" > add > Return Merchandise Authorization (RMA) [online buyers are familiar with the acronym and it might add clarity in case they may know the acronym but not what it stands for] "It is not waterproof, although the glass elements are uncoated." > [Did you mean "coated"?] It's not clear if the Limited Guarantee covers multiple disassemblies or any disassembly at all. You might want to clarify that. Why is TOC at the end rather than beginning? 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